CELPIP Writing, Task 2: Responding to a Survey, Example 3- Essay 1
You are employed by a large restaurant chain. Your line manager has written to you to ask your opinion on plans for the yearly staff trip in the coming winter. There are two options to choose from, and your manager would like feedback on which you think is best.
Options:
Option A: Take all the employees to a local restaurant with a small charge to each employee.
Option B: Have a ‘pot-luck’ dinner at the office, where everyone brings a dish that they have bought or prepared.
Why do you prefer your choice? Explain the reasons for your choice. Write about 150-200 words.
Position: To go to a restaurant
- Introduction
Neutral statement: Staff parties are always fun.
Implicit thesis statement: This year’s staff party should be at a local restaurant.
Explicit thesis statement: I believe that this year’s staff party should be held at a local restaurant.
- Body Paragraph
Topic sentence: The staff would love to go to a restaurant for a staff party this year for several reasons. First, going to a different restaurant than the one we all work at would be a nice change. Even though we have to pay a little for our dining experience there, the entire staff would like to try a different menu and observe how this staff treats its customers, because we all know what it takes to get good restaurant reviews. Another reason to go to a different restaurant would be educational, as after we ate, we could evaluate the food and the service, and then reflect on our own experience in our restaurant. At this point, we could note the differences and work on how to improve our own restaurant.
- Conclusion:
In conclusion, the staff would enjoy going to a different restaurant because it would be a nice change, and we can assess the food and service as a way to improve our own restaurant.
Essay 1
Staff parties are always fun. This year’s staff party should be at a local restaurant.
The staff would love to go to a restaurant for a staff party this year for several reasons. First, going to a different restaurant than the one we all work at would be a nice change. Even though we have to pay a little for our dining experience there, the entire staff would like to try a different menu and observe how this staff treats its customers, because we all know what it takes to get good restaurant reviews. Another reason to go to a different restaurant would be educational, as after we ate, we could evaluate the food and the service, and then reflect on our own experience in our restaurant. At this point, we could note the differences and work on how to improve our own restaurant.
In conclusion, the staff would enjoy going to a different restaurant because it would be a nice change, and we can assess the food and service as a way to improve our own restaurant. (178 words)
Essay 1: Signal words and criteria related to vocabulary
Staff parties are always fun. This year’s staff party should be at a local restaurant.
The staff would love to go to a restaurant for a staff party this year for several reasons. First, going to a different restaurant than the one we all work at would be a nice change. Even though we have to pay a little for our dining experience there, the entire staff would like to try a different menu and observe how this staff treats its customers, because we all know what it takes to get good restaurant reviews. Another reason to go to a different restaurant would be educational, as after we ate, we could evaluate the food and the service, and then reflect on our own experience in our restaurant. At this point, we could note the differences and work on how to improve our own restaurant.
In conclusion, the staff would enjoy going to a different restaurant because it would be a nice change, and we can assess the food and service as a way to improve our own restaurant. (178 words)
